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Some people fail in school but End up being successful in life why do you think that is the case? What is most important thing to succeed in life?

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Some
people
 don't perform well during their studies, yet leads a happy and satisfying
life
. I believe
success
 can not be measured with grades,
thus
 hard
work
 plays an integral part to achieve accomplishment in
life
.
This
 essay will discuss that why low graders end up being successful
people
 and what is the main key to achieving
success
.
To begin
 with, each individual student has a different calibre.
Also
, they have their own tendency to absorb knowledge in different stages of
life
. The reason is, they may have expertise in other areas; whereas in professional
life
 they have the talent to handle situations in a more professional way.
Furthermore
, it has been seen that students who get lesser grades in schools turn into famous sportsmen or an actor because they have always spent their school
life
 regretting to achieve something better which makes them more competitive and their hard
work
 pays off. In my belief
success
 mainly depend on two main things.
Firstly
, hard
work
 is directly proportional to
success
for example
, if a person needs to pass an exam and he works day and night certainly, he will get good results.
Secondly
, luck is a secondary factor that affects some
people
 and with little effort, they can achieve their goals; whereas some
people
 spend their whole
life
 but are never been able to reach their targets. To conclude, I strongly believe that hard
work
 and good luck can change the
life
 of a person and help them to become successful in every aspect. On the other side, it is not necessary that a poor grader will never do better in their practical
life
.
however
, average students are more hardworking and achieve their goals faster;
therefore
, never measure the
success
 of a child with their academic performance
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