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Some people believe that children have the freedom to make mistakes, while other argue that adults should prevent them from doing so. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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These days we have a big argument about
children
's rights to make errors. Some people think that
children
 must have their own discussion. While the other side of opinion, believe we must control. in
this
 essay writing below to discuss both ideas and share my opinion.
First
 of all, many people think that
children
 can learn from their own attempts. So we must give them the chance to try and fail or try and succeed. They will be more confident about these things if they fail and try again,
for
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 the studies in 2003 tell that we must
to
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give
the
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them the
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 chance.
However
, other persons believe that we must control the
children
 and try to watch them and
advice
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them for
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for
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 everything and prevent them from doing anything bad to keep them safe. To sum up, some persons think that controlling
children
 is good for them while the other
option
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 people think that giving them the freedom to try and
fail
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 have more advantages and benefits. In my opinion, we must consider both and give
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freedom to our
children
 to have errors while we are watching them
this
 will keep them save same time give them a chance to discover their world.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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