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The chars below show changes in the proportion of energy produced from different resources in a country in 1985 and 2003.

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Clearly, we can see the percentage of oil in the
year
 1985 is very high when compared to in the
year
 2003 i.e.,from 52% to gradually decreases to 39%.
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nuclear
energy
,which
also
 had a fall in terms of their percentage
that is
 from 22% in 1985 reaches to 8% in the
year
 2003.Now we will discuss those energies which have increased in the
year
 2003.In natural gas,coal
energy
 and solar
energy
 we saw an increment in proportions
such
 as in the
year
 1983 all the three resources had 13%,8% and 1% of energies and in the
year
 2003 they got to rise up to 23%,225 and 45 respectively.and hydro
energy
 remains as stable in both the years. The given chart gives an illustration of the
energy
 produced from the different resources in a country in the
year
 1985 and in 2003.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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