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An increasing number of people nowadays are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 in technology in the contemporary world made society's life comfortable in terms of shopping on the internet.
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 the community find some trouble while choosing sizes and quality of the products given online,
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-saving and ease of
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 reachability by cutting off fuel cost are way more advantageous than drawbacks. The most significant merit of purchasing by online applications is that the folks do not need to travel by their own conveyances to distinct stores rather they have to just surf the various sites to buy their things and order which could save not
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 cut the cost of fuels and deprivation of their vehicles. According to recent publications by "The tribune" Chandigarh, 80%of youngsters order online food and clothing either to their workplaces or homes to save travelling
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, some brands allow the public to return or exchange the purchased stuff within particular days without distortion or damage which people find quite easy and reliable.
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, there are some demerits of buying
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 with internet services.
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 and foremost is fraud.
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, some people order expensive gadgets
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 as cell phones, which, in return, gets cheaper things
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 of the purchased
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. For an instance, a college student in Punjab University ordered an iPhone 11 worth 50,000 INR from Flipkart and received a soap in the box which was a kind of mental harassment for him. Another considerable disadvantage is the delay in the deliveries. Sometimes, it takes plenty of
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 to reach the object to its destination that a person remains worried till he gets it and
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 if received some kind of issue in the item it takes more
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 to recover which the community feel less interested into
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 option. To conclude, despite the fact that people find illogical issues
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 as delay and receiving wrong
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 by purchasing online products, the modern world has provided the opportunity of buying and selling things from home without wasting
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 and travel expenses which plays a vital role towards working individuals as well as elderly.
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