Human activities have negative effects on plant and animal species. Some people think it is too late to do anything about this problem. Others believe that effective measures can be taken to improvw this situation. Discuss both view and give our opinion.

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about how you spend your free

time

and

who

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you spend your free

time

with?

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,is it better to spend more of your free

time

with your

friends

or with your family? In my point of

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it is better to spend my free

time

with my family members.

Firstly

,I should say without family, life will be empty indeed

thus

we need to have more strong communication with our close relatives.

moreover

, friendship relationship is necessary

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our

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life

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time

too.

Secondly

,we have to think about different types of activities and

interest

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that we have arranged for our free

time

,I believe that you can find some of the activities out more joy and fun if you do them with your

friends

for example

;studying, shopping, attending graduation celebration, participating our friend`s wedding parties,

also

there are many hobbies that you would

prefferto

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prefer to

find out them with your immediate family and close relatives

such

as new year holidays, birthday parties,etc

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infact

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in fact

spending free

time

with your family depends on how busy your family is ,clearly;if your family members are busy and have less free

time

to share it with you,

hence

you spend more free

time

with your

friends

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my family is my priority in my relationship attitude, to spend my free

time

with them and of course my friend groups to change my mood and energize me a lot In conclusion ,I`d better spend appropriate

time

with both groups family and

friends

which is needed for any people who

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eager to have a healthy relationship

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