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There are social, medical and technical problems associated with the use of mobile phones. What forms do they take? Do you agree that the problems outweight the benefits of mobile phone?

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Introduction
Nowadays mobile
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phones
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phone
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is
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are
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 a part of
dailylife
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daily life
 .It becomes a
necessities
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necessity
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 in form of communication in business and day to day activities.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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with
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 mobile phone in
social related
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 activities has been used in exploiting young ones in pornography,mobile
phones
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 are used to upload scandalous
vedio
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video
videos
.Mobiles
phones
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 are user
freindly
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friendly
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and can be used in any
forms
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form
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 of fraud and hacking bank accounts by using different
simcards
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sim cards
.
Body paragraph 3
On the other
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hand
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 some of the medical studies
shows
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 that
use
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the use
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 of mobile phone had an adverse effect on a
persons
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person
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 health,using low batteries
phones
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 emit higher exposure
in
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to
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 radiation.
Body paragraph 4
Innovations in mobiles
phones
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has
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have
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 been aggressive since
competation
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competition
 is high in different brands of
phones
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.
Sufisticated
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Sophisticated
 features on
certain
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the certain
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application
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applications
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 of
phones
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 can be
stressfull
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stressful
 for the user.
Body paragraph 5
On
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other
their
othere
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the othere
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 way around mobile
phones
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 are
benificial
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beneficial
 in
such
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 a way that it has been used in blogging
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which gives ideas and important
informations
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information
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.
Conclusion
Therefore
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i
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 conclude that are certain forms of problems that
outweight
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outweigh
 the
benifits
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benefits
ofba
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of
of a
 mobile
phones
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 when
its
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it's
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 not used and introduced properly.

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