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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some fatal traffic accidents caused by the lack of
road
 safety should be reduced. Some argue that
road
 safety should be improved by increasing the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. I firmly agree with
this
 contention and will
further
 present
explanation
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 in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, nowadays underage people are permitted by their parents to drive their cars or motorcycles even though they do not have driving licenses yet. Their driving skills have not been formally tested.
However
, young people who already get their driving licenses
also
 cause some
troubles
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. Teenagers often drive recklessly on the
road
 and do not think about the consequences. It is because their ability to control their emotions has not fully developed.
As a result
, the
curiousity
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curiosity
 pushes them to do some prohibited acts
instead
 of restricting themselves. On the
road
,
definitely
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 they will risk others. It is better for governments to enact new rules regarding
this
 case, especially increasing the minimum legal age for driving.
In addition
, teenagers do not fully comprehend about the
road
 signs. They usually break the
road
 sign rules and drive as far as they want. If these
behaviors
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 are not fixed, they will harm others who always try to follow the rules. So, young people should improve their awareness and think more
of
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 others' safety. Parents need to ensure their kids behave well on the
road
 and if they don't, parents should give some punishment. In conclusion, increasing the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike is an easy option to eradicate crashes. Teenagers have to follow that rule.
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