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Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement.

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There are many people who think wealth does not necessarily guarantee
happiness
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. I partly agree with
this
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 statement. On the one hand, I agree that having a lot of
money
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 does not ensure
happiness
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.
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, we can not take care of our family, we spend too much time working to earn
money
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 to serve our ambition.
For instance
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, many richest in the world don'
t
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 have a happy
life
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 with their wife and they are divorced. They are always busy with their career and only spend almost time per day working
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 as Bill Gates, Elon Musk, Jeff Bezos or many famous actors in the world. So
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 why they don'
t
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 have fulfilling
happiness
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.
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,
money
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 can not buy health or true friends. In fact, even if you are poor, you must be a nice person with a good personality to receive true friendship.
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, the most important thing in our
life
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 is freedom. As we know, we are always want to live a free
life
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 and do whatever we want. We don'
t
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 need to obey our parents to do some things that they think it is good for us. An example of
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 is the story about Japan princess with her husband. She is against her family to marry a normal man and gave up her Japanese princess position to live a simple
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 as people.
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, I disagree with the opinion that wealth does not necessarily guarantee
happiness
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. As we know, when we have lots of
money
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 we can do whatever we want in our
life
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.
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, if we are seriously ill, we need a lot of
money
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 for treatment.
Money
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 cannot buy health, but without
money
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, we will die.
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, we have to pay our monthly bills and daily living expenses. So if we are rich we don'
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 have to worry about it and can buy expensive and best quality items. In conclusion, many individuals believe that having a lot of
money
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 does not necessarily
happiness
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. I partly agree with
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 view because it has two sides when we become wealthy.
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