Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, some experts believe that young
people
should work some charity clubs in their spare time which like help elderly or helpless people
. I completely agree in
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, these winned
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winner
teenegars
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teenagers
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