1. Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

There are all kinds of people, those who look for certain stability and avoid new things while others search to embrace them as opportunities.
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they think it can be
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it could be unnecessary.
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the opposite, those who believe that something positive always comes from a challenge. It seems to me that these persons often try to live a more
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, they live with more emotion, in constant search to reach new goals and targets. Provided that, having the capacity of adapting can create new opportunities. There may
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and mature way. To conclude, transformation forms part of our path and stagnating, in my opinion, can be demotivating. It is necessary for human beings to live motivated and
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to achieve new goals and that can only be reached with diversity. Even though it could be small changes that are not in our control.
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or a family member dying, or a relationship breaking up. These moments form part of living and it is not possible to avoid them. There will always be people with
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adaptability than others. For some, it is more difficult to face challenges but it turns out to be inevitable.
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