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Is it Better for Young People to Get Advice from Older People or Younger People?

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In
this
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 essay, I will discuss whether it is better for young
people
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 to get
advice
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 from older
people
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, or if age does not really matter when it comes to giving good
advice
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. In my opinion, I agree that it is better for young
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 to get
advice
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 from older
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.
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 is because older
people
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 usually have more life experience. They have faced many different situations in their lives, so their
advice
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 can be more helpful and reliable.
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, if I want
advice
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 on how to get a great job, I would rather ask someone who has worked in different places and tried many jobs. They can tell me what worked for them and what didn’t.
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, a younger person who only had one good job might have just been lucky, and may not have much experience to share.
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, some
people
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 believe it is better to get
advice
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 from younger
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. They say that younger
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 are more
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 and understand the modern world better.
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, if you are a student, you might get better
advice
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 from someone who is currently studying, rather than from someone who finished school many years ago.
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 is because things change quickly, and younger
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 might know more about what is happening now.
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, I believe that both older and younger
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 can give useful
advice
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, depending on the situation. Some older
people
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 may not give the best
advice
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, and some younger
people
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 might be very wise and helpful. Sometimes, you may find that an older person,
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 of understanding of the current ideas in circulation,
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may give the wrong
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. In other cases, younger
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 may not have enough experience but may still give great
advice
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. It is very hard to say with uncertainty whether
advice
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 is better received from the old or the young.

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Task Achievement
The argument could be developed further with more specific examples or contrasting views to strengthen your points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and that ideas flow logically from one to the next.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider varying your sentence structures to enhance readability and engagement.
Task Achievement
You presented a balanced view of the topic and acknowledged the strengths of both older and younger people’s advice.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction clearly states your opinion on the topic, and the conclusion summarizes your argument well.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life experience
  • practical solutions
  • broader perspective
  • wisdom
  • long-term consequences
  • foresight
  • limited life experience
  • contemporary issues
  • rapidly evolving world
  • innovative solutions
  • modern thinking
  • fresh ideas
  • timeless wisdom
  • combination of advice
  • merges experience with contemporary insight
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