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Life now is better than it was 100 years ago To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Over 100 years, there has been a myriad of
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 across the globe. While there are some positive shifts, there are
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 negative implications. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss what are the advantages and disadvantages of these
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 and explain why I think we have a better life than those in the past.
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 with, technological advancement brought a better lifestyle for
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.
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,
people
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 around the world are now able to enjoy faster, more efficient, and more convenient lives than before.
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,
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 now can explore anywhere they have never been to with help of navigation. They go straight to their destinations without being lost because the machine even finds roads that are not crowded and lets
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 travel without traffic jams.
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, all works of
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 have better opportunities to make their dreams come true.
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, students are given chances to study abroad and entrepreneurs can expand their business overseas. These examples clearly demonstrate that technological development provides
people
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 with a better lifestyle.
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, social
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 contributed to progressing technologies
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 produced pernicious outcomes.
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 of all, competitions between
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 increasingly become fierce as they have rivals on an international scale.
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,
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 pay less attention to the process of competitions but more to results, which negatively impacts mutual relationships.
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 of all,
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 feel lonely more than ever before. Despite
people
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 being connected to social networks including Facebook, Instagram, and Twitter, they do not have sound and robust relations with offline
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. Statistics on mental health issues conducted by the Australian government represents that how badly
people
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 are depressed these days.
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,
people
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 are confronted with some issues associated with technological development. To sum up, the advancement of technologies brought both beneficial and malign aspects to society.
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, as advantages of social
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 take precedence over disadvantages, I strongly agree that we have a better life than
people
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 100 years ago.
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