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Wild animals have no place in the 21 St century and protection of wild animal is waste of resources.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#animals #place #st #century #protection #waste #resources
Some people think protecting wild
animals
 is costly and we need to use
this
 money with education, health, and security, but in my opinion, I disagree because the loss of species can disrupt the balance of the ecosystem. Biodiversity is essential for the balance of the ecological community and it is known it involves law enforcement, research, and security
however
 it is vital to maintain
animals
 from different species
otherwise
 it would be challenging to discover new treatments and medicines without these
animals
 too. Society is responsible for deforestation and for
this
 reason some of these
animals
 lost their original habitat due to human habitats and worst of
this
, many of them suffer from illegal hunting and fashion industry. It is important to develop breeding programs for endangered species and the government have to promote the construction of human house apart from the animal's habitats.
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