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In many parts of the world, children are given more freedom in the past. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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The definition of the word ability is controversial, some people think giving their
children
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 absolute
freedom
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 is the correct way in raising
children
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. Others believe there must be a rule in using
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. In
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 effects of flexibility in development. In the beginning, there are many aspects of development, the psychological
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 is more important than physical development. Many research the personality and thinking
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 of humans emerges from learning new things. Trying new experiences does not happen suddenly but can achieve by parents giving their heir the
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 to try them. The opportunity
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 given to boys to attempt something new as tasting new food or doing anything they love to make them with a strong personality and grows with leader characteristics.
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, If caregivers give their siblings the right to choose their friends, and after a ,while the child learns from
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 relation that his friend becomes a bad boy and breaks his relation with him.
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, we can say he acted like an adult man who knows the difference between right and wrong behaviours.
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, giving
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 to any guy is a positive way that enables him to learn from his mistakes.
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, giving the privilege to your loved body can help him to become a new person or become productive. Many cases we heard about it in our community regarding parents give their
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 the right to choose what they want to study in the university and they decide to become an artist or singer despite the parent's desire, after while they become successful in their career.
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, the bad
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 of
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 is huge and maybe lead to disaster. If the parents give the
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 to their
children
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 at the wrong time and the consequences could be dire. In an instant, choosing an unemployed person to marry with its type of
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 to decide your future partner,
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,
this
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 choice will cause harmful consequences to the entire family. In conclusion,
freedom
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 is important and vital in our lives
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 and must be in a child's characteristic.
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, the paramount is to use it in the correct way and incorrect time to decrease any mistakes.
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