With growing populations in cities, more and more people live in homes with little or no outdoor space. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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, more and more
people
are commuting from different areas. Because of it,
people
adjust in small rooms or even without outside space.
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also
what steps are needed to be taken. If
people
live in small rooms and without space, they will get distracted. They will not focus on their work.
Moreover
, they will
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their jobs and it might create a problem of finance. Sometimes married
people
cannot spend their time with each other. Children cannot study well in a single small room and it will
also
affect
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their study as well.
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, currently, companies are providing
facility
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of work from home to their employees, and if employees live in a small room with their family, so they will not complete and focus on their work. The Government should take steps to control on
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the construction
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of
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the building
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building
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. They should
also
make a strong policy to construct any building. It should
also
create facilities in
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, so
people
do not have to move to urban areas.
For instance
, if basic facilities
such
as health, employment, education are provided in the rural areas,
people
will stay there for a long time and it will create a positive outcome for our society.
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essay discussed the drawbacks of increasing population in the cityside
such
as
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the job, effect on children’s education. In my opinion, the government should take
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steps to solve
this
problem and
also
focus on the development of the countryside.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban density
  • public transportation infrastructure
  • social interaction
  • community bonding
  • mental well-being
  • urban biodiversity
  • urban heat island effect
  • energy-efficient
  • affordable housing
  • cramped living conditions
  • innovative architecture
  • interior design
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • quality of life
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