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In some countries more and more people are becoming interested in finding out bout the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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In many countries, a growing number of
people
 are curious about (intrigued by) the history of buildings they dwell in for several reasons- fear from superstition, loss of saving.
Moreover
,
people
 can get enough
information
 about facilities through their real state agent or construction office. Owning a house or apartment is a huge investment for the majority of
people
.
Therefore
 they are keen on taking precautious measures to secure their financing, which can be threatening if the building or the house has terrible notorieties.
For example
, if a criminal act has occurred in a building or a place,
such
 as murder or others,
people
 fear
such
 incidents will somehow have consequences on their lives. Even if what they believe is just a myth.
Besides
,
this
 bad reputation could drop the market value of the place. Due to these facts,
people
 should be inquisitive, especially (provided)if these decisions would have an impact on their family.
Also
, now dwellers can reach whatever
information
 is needed through various channels. By asking your realtor,
neighbor
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, fetching data from the internet, or paying a visit to the construction office, they will be able to provide enough
information
 for that place. After that, if anything goes awry,
people
 would blame themselves. In conclusion, in many countries,
people
 are more intrigued by the history of the places they intend to live in, for various reasons as their families' safety and money investment. There are a number of ways that can help them acquire
this
information
: internet, offices.
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