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Despite the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. What is the cause? What can be done about it?

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in nowadays society, technology brings a number of benefits in farming, but it is evident that some populations in the world still suffering from hungry. in
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 issue and what we can do to deal with it. according to the red cross-organization, around 60% of populations are struggling to have
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, especially in Africa,
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 issue can result from a lack of skills or knowledge about farming or short of natural sources to develop farming,
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, we
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 can read some articles about in some western counties huge amount of
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 be wasted, unfair distribution of
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 can be another reason for
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 global issue. facing
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 international problem and trying to improve the situation can be done by
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 and individuals, regarding
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, some countries in high development level, can share the skills or transfer some professional workers to the countries that need help, despite the
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 working together, individuals
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 can do some contributions,
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, just buy enough
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 in order to do not waste it, or can donate some money to support the organization that works on
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 problem. to sum up, living in
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 modern life, have plentiful rights to enjoy,
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, we can not ignore the international problem- hungry,
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 work together and individuals contribute to it, let people around the world can living without starving.
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