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The internet has become profoundly efficient and popular that people choose it as a platform to learn. Some believe that it would eventually replace the need for books. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, humankind widely
use
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 technology for the purpose of reading and writing. The worldwide popularity of adopting online sources as a method
learning
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of learning
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 is a strong example of
this
 trend. Several people argue that the computer network will replace
books
 as a source of acquiring information
however
 I do not agree with
this
 proposition.
This
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books
 are the only resources to develop
expertise
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 knowledge and book lovers always prefer buying
books
 to using the internet. To commence with,
books
 contain complete information on a specific topic so students need the
books
 to develop expertise on the subject matter.
For example
, the students who are pursuing academic studies,
they
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must buy
books
 to
fulfill
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 the criteria of their studies.
This
 reflects the momentous role of
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paperbacks
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paper backs
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paperbacks
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 in building
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complete theoretical and practical knowledge. In fact, humans can develop strong fundamentals of their learning only
by
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with
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 the help of
books
.
Next
,
majority
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the majority
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 of people who are used to reading novels choose to buy
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paperbacks
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paper backs
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paperbacks
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 rather than reading the
books
in
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 websites. A study revealed that more than ninety
percent
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folks
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of folks
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 engaged in literature
select
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selected
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 to purchase hard copies.
Furthermore
, a large population claim that they receive
higher
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 level of satisfaction by reading
books
 than surfing
net
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the net
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.
This
 proves that book lovers will demand
books
instead
 of searching for learning materials on screen. In conclusion,
books
 are thorough and reliable sources of knowledge for aspiring experts and book lovers. The internet cannot replace
books
 in future.
Books
 will be in demand for many generations to come.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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