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Some peopel say it's a waste of time to plan for the future. We should live in the present. To what extend do you agree or disagree?.

#peopel #waste #time #plan #future
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people
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plan
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life
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opportunities
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plan
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people
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plan
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planning
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clear all the time which ensure
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the completion of any
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research conducted by
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university
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Harverd shows that students who
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their trimester achieve a
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great
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at the end
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 that we won'
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opportunity
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People
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life
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goals
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goals
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For instance
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 of becoming a
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busman
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 that he
need
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needs
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 to improve his communication skills. By setting a
plan
such
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attending
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communication
 course, he will not miss any available course which will help him to
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achieve
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goals
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eventually
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On the other hand
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 set any certain
plan
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achieve
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opportunity
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 that setting
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plans
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achieving
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