Certainly, employment is mandatory to earn bread, cloth and shelters. However, in this competitive era, people prefer

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On the other side, there are some negative sides of
self employment
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also
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, the whole responsibility is on an individual itself.
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, if he will not
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work hard
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he will be responsible for the whole loss but if he is working under any other company
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he
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not need to think about the profit and loss of the company he just
need
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to do his own work.
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, he will try to earn more and more in
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circumstances he might prefer to avoid his family which may
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results
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daily minor fights and frustrations in the family members.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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