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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss Both views and give your opinion.

#people #attention
The pie chart
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 illustrates the destination of Anthropology
graduates
, in percentage, after they are graduated
from
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bachelor
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 degree.
Furthermore
, the table
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below
 displays the salaries of each job description in a percentage with a
variation
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 of ranges after the
graduates
 have 5
years's
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 working experience. Overall,
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 are five destinations of choices which are full-time
work
, part-time
work
, part-time
work
 with graduated
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study
, graduated
stydy
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study
,
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unemployed
, and
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unknown
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. Most of the
graduates
 did
a
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full time
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work
. The tables
catagorize
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categorize
 a type of employment
in
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group
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 which are freelance, government sector, and private companies. There are
a
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5
rages
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 of salaries starting from $25,000 to more than $100000.
To begin
 with, more than half of the
graduates
 got full-time
work
 after they graduated. Part-time
work
 and unemployed are the
second
 and
third
 popular choice, around 15% and 12%
respectievely
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respectively
.
Next
,
graduates
which
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 selected to do
further
 study are the same of
unknow
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group
 (8% for each destination).
Last
, only 5% of people did both part-time
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work
 and postgrad study at the same time.
Moreover
, after working for five
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, most
of
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people
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the people
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 receive salaries
more
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of more
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 than $7500. The
employees
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 in private companies is a
group
 that
seem
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 to have the lowest income
compare
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 to
other
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the other
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 two
group
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. only 55% of people can get over income over $7500 while
other
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group
 is
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up to
 80%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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