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Many teenagers now have their own smart phone. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.

#teenagers #phone
Freedom is a birthright for every human
beings
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 and so do youngsters.They
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 to be
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independent in Information Technology devices nowadays.Some people consider it as
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 positive factor while others refute the notion.
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 paragraphs illustrate both
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 of
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 in
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First
 of all,novice persons are exploring
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 of opportunities for being
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 stable in
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stage
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 of their lives.
Moreover
,mobile phones are becoming
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 for
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 of their skills.There is no doubt it has some benefits for the current generation as they can find out new ways through internet-enabled devices by enhancing their knowledge.
In addition
 to that,as networking in the world gives enough opportunities to connect to their loved ones
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 fingertips,they can be well informed and upgrade their understanding of society
also
. For an instance,in today's world,many college students do a different kinds of courses on the web as they are becoming self rely on gadgets.
However
,it does create negative impacts on their physical health and mindset. Immaturity is one of the biggest hurdles for them to understand good things and bad ones.Criminal activities are increasing as they are no one to
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 them. Sexual contents are available free on websites so they are becoming addicted to
this
 which leads to many unfortunate incidences.
Such
 as,in India rape cases by
teenagers
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 are increasing in uncontrollable
mannner
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. To summarize,learning new concepts through computer gadgets are important but to go berserk after the usage of it can create chaos.They must be guided in the right direction even if they are becoming self-aware of being free
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication
  • access to information
  • safety and security
  • entertainment
  • educational opportunities
  • addiction
  • excessive screen time
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • distraction
  • lack of focus
  • privacy concerns
  • social disconnection
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • opinion
  • outweigh
  • limits
  • screen time
  • online safety
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