Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It's often argued that advertising is the best way to convince
people
to buy
products
. While others believe that individuals no longer pay attention to it. In my opinion,
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agree with the
second
statement because of an
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number of
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realms
and
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allows everyone to publish everything.
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essay will discuss both views in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with the
first
argument, there are many benefits of advertising that need to be noticed.
Firstly
, due to the advancement of technology many
people
are associated with
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and spend most of their
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on it.
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, a recent survey in Harvard University published every
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in London city spent %75 of their leisure
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in a day on Instagram and Facebook. Because of
this
, it makes them
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be familiar with all the
products
that are published through social
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media
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medias
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.
Secondly
, since advertising
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more developed many
people
are attracted by
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and bright broadcasts due
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actors and directors.
Therefore
, advertising plays a vital role to attract individuals attention to purchase things.
On the other hand
, there are
also
other things
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to be considered, mainly, most the
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aim is to introduce their
products
and attract costumers by fake
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information
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about their
products
.
For instance
, a survey published in China %75 goods that are advertised on the internet are fake.
Secondly
, with an
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advertising
people
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loosing
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their
attentions
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attention
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about them.
For instance
, according to a survey in
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the number of advertising has increased on
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Tv by %60 compared to
last
year. To sum up,
although
there are believed that advertising is a good way to convince
people
to purchase things,
people
start to lose their interest because of the huge number of them. After thorough analysis on
this
subject, I can indicate that there will be no future for the advertisement.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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