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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, poverty is a widely spoken topic around the world. Whereas, there are several reasons for
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 as the unwillingness of
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 to help the less fortunate.
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, in what ways they can be actually helped?
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 with, one of the main reasons is that developed
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 are not showing enough support to the
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 with poor economic conditions.
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, it is evident that there are areas in Africa with people suffering from hunger, meanwhile, it is
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 the fact that
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 like the US and Japan are investing massive amounts in technology.
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 to the above, it is
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 visible that enough importance is not given to the lives in some regions, whereas,
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 has resulted in the poor always being the same with no hope.
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, states can still help each other.
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, governments can enforce laws to allocate a sum every year to help
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 in trouble.
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, successful business organizations can open operations in
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 areas,
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, create new job opportunities, and eventually improving the economic situation. Nestle,
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, invested in cocoa plantations in places with poverty,
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, the company helped to improve the living standards of the local farmers. In conclusion, it can be said that poverty will always remain
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an ongoing issue, unfortunately, nations will have to face it at a given time.
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, it is significant for the well to do
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 to lend a helping hand
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 those who are in trouble.
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, the world would be a better place in the future.
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