To begin with, due to the discovery of more convenient transportation system, scientists found that the automated vehicles

To begin
with, due to the discovery of high convenient transportation system, scientists found that the automated vehicles, which were programmed. Many
expertists
Correct your spelling
experts
expertises
believe that
this
innovation will lead to
decrease
Add an article
a decrease
the decrease
show examples
of
Change preposition
in
show examples
accident rate happen in
yearly
Replace the word
years
show examples
because of lack of awareness, carefulness,
fallen
Wrong verb form
falling
show examples
asleep while driving, don't mind a signboard while driving etc ... Even though automated vehicles will help to reduce
accident
Correct article usage
the accident
show examples
rate it can be malfunction because of computer-generated software.
Furthermore
, even there is
Correct your spelling
no
show examples
not
Correct your spelling
no
show examples
service charge to the supplier, the maintenance fee is expensive due to the high-tech of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
driverless vehicles.
Also
Add a comma
,Also
show examples
it needed to maintain well.So that, passengers could not afford
this
facility.
Submitted by dhanoagagan36 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: