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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#universities #numbers #students
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.territtery
education
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 plays
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 role in youth's life.Some individuals may convince that higher
education
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 is much convenient for men rather than women,others probably disagree.
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belief
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 that both genders should have the same right in joining university
education
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.
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,
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 conclusion.
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,Ladies around the globe have suffered from a plethora of dilemmas,learning prevention is one of them.
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 may return to the habits and the traditions of a nation
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 try to
devistate
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devastate
 women's identity.
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, many of
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 positions are not suited
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 because they are not qualified enough.To cite an example,In some places in Saudia Arabia ,ladies are banned to walk alone and even
to get
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 out of her home
with
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her
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 own.
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, what can be said here is that
femals
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females
 face a myriad of
challanges
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challenges
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obsticals
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obstacles
 inside
her
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 community.
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,if
femals
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females
female
 have the same chance
of
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 men in joining higher
education
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,they will be able to participate in politics and play
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quintessential
quinessential
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 role in
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political work.
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, girls ,who graduate from universities , will be able to bring up their children in order to be good citizens.
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,some studies have proven that
well educated
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 mothers help their kids to achieve high academic performance.
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,university
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 for women can help in the future of the coming generations. In conclusion, what can be mentioned here
that
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 the development of any country
staring
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starting
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 with its
education
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equal
opporunities
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opportunities
 for both gender.I believe that
territtery
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territory
education
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 accelerates the quality of life for both genders.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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