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Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible. while others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Education
 plays a very crucial role in the upbringing of
children
 while it is believed by some individuals that
parents
 should start the early
education
 of their
children
 efficiently but others think that the minimum
age
 of
children
 should be 7 years
to begin
education
.
this
 essay will discuss both views along with my personal point of view. To commence with,
children
 have very sharp mind during early
age
 and they learn everything easily. It is fact that they have to face a lot of challenges in school including high competition of study, behaviour among teachers as well as class fellows and how to follow regulations of schools. Meanwhile, some
parents
 find it useful to send their growing buds to preschools for formal
education
. Childhood is the high time for
children
 to observe and learn from others mistakes.
On the contrary
 side, some
parents
 want to teach and nourish their
children
 on their own because they do not feel it safe to send the apple of their eye outside. the major reason behind it is the fear of crimes and child molestation.
In addition
 to
this
,
parents
 think that their child is not capable to do studying in small
age
. It is a very sensitive
age
 and they should live
however
 they want. It is not good for them to have the burden of rules and regulations. To recapitulate it,
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 believe that
parents
 are the
first
 teachers of their
children
 and they have responded to teach them very necessary things before school. The minimum
age
 should be 4 years for sending
children
 to pre-schools as they have an understanding of common things at
this
age
.
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