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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your teachers.

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The percentage of expenses spent and what are the preferences that people usually buy in a specific European region is illustrated by two graphs in distinct years, 1958 and 2008. Overall, it's clearly evident that commodities like housing and entertainment detained large amount
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 both dates given.
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, the majority of consuming items increased their numbers, except two of them, clothing and travel/transport, which decrease considerably in 2008. In 1958, a small minority of Europeans of
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 of clothing, which detained a large portion of the pie graph, at 32%. Services for home and person's amuse followed staying on
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 position, at 22% and 18%, respectively.
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, in 2008 there were man changes in population preferences. The
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 one was observed in housing expenses proportions which grew 10% while clothing items went down significantly, reaching 32% in
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, gorgeous articles and food rose rapidly almost the same quantity until getting similar percentage, at 17%.
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 that, travelling services
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 increased their amount from 6% to 13%.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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