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Some people think that for individuals, planning for future is a waste of time. It is more important for individuals to focus on the present. Do you agree or disagree?

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Yesterday is history, tomorrow is a mystery, today is a gift of God, which is why we call it the present.
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 is a very famous quote given by M.R.Bean. ,Yes today is the gift of God, but as the
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 we have to plan for it. In
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 regard, many believe that
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 planning for
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 is waste of
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,
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, they
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 say that it's more necessary to plan for the present. I completely disagree with the idea of planning.
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 essay will discuss some reasons for my opinion.
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 with, we all know that no one can predict the
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 exactly, while, one can do
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 with
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respect
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 situation and environment.
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, if we do not map for our
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then
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 in the
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 we will face the consequences for not planning the same. There are tonnes of examples around us who had failed in their field without doing
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 planning, and even today these
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 educate
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 to plan for their upcoming days.
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, I would like to talk about M.R.Ambani, who is one of the richest
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 in the world. When he was in England, for his graduation, he never planned for his business, and when he became 30 years old he realise that he didn't save any money for his
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.
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, why do
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 consider
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 planning as a waste of
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? In my opinion, I think that
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 don't ant make their present-day full of planning for their upcoming days, as they can enjoy at present
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 why to worry about
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. While those
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 who are not thinking about their
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 are already wasting their
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. To conclude,
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 should consider
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 planning as their part of life, and they should try to connect their
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 with the present situation in order to save
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 and even to make a better career and
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.
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