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In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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advancement
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the advancement
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 of technology will remove the printed dailies and books in future. Because people will start depending on the
internet
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 as many
newspapers
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 and magazines are
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online. In my opinion, I partially disagree with the statement and I will describe the reasons elaborately in the following paragraphs. First of all, the
internet
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 has made our life easier and
convenient
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more convenient
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. It saves our money,
time
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 and energy. Even we use the
internet
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 to buy
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products and for educational purposes
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also
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. Nowadays,
newspapers
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 are
also
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 available online.
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 number of online readers
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 increasing dramatically. Because it’s free of cost and available in all places.
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 as
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 a service holder doesn’t get enough
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 to buy printed dailies.
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, he can easily get into the online news portal and read it
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 going to the office by bus.
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, if anyone seeks the previous news
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 he can search it online and go through it easily ,
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 he can read several
newspapers
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 at the same
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 and keep him updated.
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, there are few people who always prefer printed
newspapers
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. Because still there are some remote areas where
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internet
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the internet
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 and smartphones are not available.
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, they have to depend on printed copies.
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, collecting printed dailies,
magazines
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and magazines
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are
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 one kind of hobby. But these numbers are decreasing surprisingly. Because people are much busier than before and associated with many activities. So, they don't get extra
time
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 to buy printed
newspapers
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 to read. It can be said that
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to sum up
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, technology cannot remove the traditional methods completely. Depending on age groups
still
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few customers will always prefer physical
newspapers
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 rather than online copies.

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