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Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Past experiences are the foundation of our present as well as future. Some people think that learning about what happened in the past is merely just a waste of time. I completely disagree with the latter statement as analysis has shown that knowledge of history can guide us to a better world.
Moreover
, ancestors stories are the ladders for our motivation which I will be discussing more in the forthcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
, history is the torchbearer for the upcoming generations to follow the right path. We can gain so much wisdom from our previous generation which will forever lead us to a brighter era. If we look at the mistakes which were made by our past generations we can always learn how to build us a brighter future by dispensing them,
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 previous world was situated on wars and corpse that was unavoidable to have a livelihood and was guided by different kingdoms. But as time has passed people sort out ways to ignore wars and form a peaceful environment.
Secondly
, literature is full of personalities with great minds, whose autobiographies motivated us in a variety of ways. In that era, the way everything was built and acted upon is still the basis of many modern foundations.
For example
, we can never forget the blessing of Medicine that was gifted to us by the physicians of the past and the invention of Penicillin was a life-changing one
that is
 still being followed blindly to cure many diseases.
Nonetheless
, the beginning of art can never be forgotten as it was invented and was nourished by artists from prior mankind. If we have to recall one name can never be removed from the books which is the name of the greatest Shakespear whom even the youth worships to date. In conclusion, I will reiterate my words in support of disagreement with the thinking that learning history is a wasteful task.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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