Governemnts should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Nowadays, there is some argument

that is

between train and automotive industries which one is a suitable investment for countries. In my opinion,

cars

or some technological vehicles have more

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than trains.

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essay would explain some transport

methods

which have better gain than railways. In a few decades, technology has risen for trains that include Maglev Train

System

which you can travel in the air and

this

system

is very fast. But Maglev Train

system

is not just increased

system

in transport

methods

so you can find a lot of

georgeous

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gorgeous

projects for

cars

, busses, planes and alternative transfer systems.

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instance,

Vacuum

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the Vacuum

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Transfer Method is the fastest transfer way which people can travel in

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invented by Elon Musk. That

system

has uploaded day by day and it will be futuristic technology

furthermore

, it will be cheaper than now so governments can spend money like

this

future come projects. Maglev Trains is not just one example, I can give a lot of

example

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self control

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cars

. Recently all car companies work on

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car

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process and you can see on ways as Tesla that

also

invented by Elon Musk. About

this

system

society can sit on their car seat in safety and

this

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automated

cars

will solve traffic problems. In conclusion, Railway is

good

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alternative for

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but it is not the best solution in the future. If we want more safety and

faster

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path, we should choose more scientific

methods

and we will

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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sustainable transport
carbon footprint
commuter congestion
interconnectivity
public infrastructure
operational costs
mass transit
urban development
energy efficiency
socio-economic disparities
heritage railways
tourist attractions
environmental conservation
urban sprawl
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high-speed rail
infrastructure investment
traffic management
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