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The continued ride in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

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Increasing
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number
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the number
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 of the world
population
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more
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a more
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 serious risk for
earth
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the earth
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 than plastic pollution and increasing
tempretures
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temperatures
. Countries
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 as India and China has
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already
 put strict laws to control their citizen
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countdown
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 as these are the
fastest growing
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nantions
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nations
. Increasing numbers of
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a citizen
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citizen
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 of
resourses
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resources
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main
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 problem facing in Africa.
USA
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 and many
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developed
 nations
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 poor lands by providing help but
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increasing
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the increasing
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 number of
popullation
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population
 is ignorance of
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government
governmanet
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the governmanet
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 and people not knowing about
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family
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management
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and
 its benefits. In
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India
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, Today in many villages, people are still
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unware
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unaware
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 of the
probelms
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problems
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occured
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occur
occurred
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number of
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childern
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children
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then
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than
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 they should be.
This
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of
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the
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population
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 numbers can cause great problems to the world we live in. the Natural
resourses
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resources
 are less,
however
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, we are using
it
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them
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 more than we should.
Factorys
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Factors
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this
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are
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primery
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primary
 source of
harmfull
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harmful
 gasses. These
manifactruing
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manufacturing
 industries are working on 100% capacity yet they are not enough to provide enough goods to the people. It is predicted that by 2050 worlds
population
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 will reach 10
billions
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,
futhermore
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furthermore
scientist
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have
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 looking
ways
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 to control medical crises that can not
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handle
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current
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 numbers of doctors we have as per regulations. humanity have reached
moon
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 and mars, but
serious
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 problem we face is still
at
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on
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earth
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the earth
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 which is
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overpopulation
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over
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overpopulation
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population
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 is the main factor.
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