He recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your leather say how you feel about his performance. Give details of your musical activities explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

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Dear Mr Bonjovi,

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week I bought your concert ticket which was held in our city concert hall ,Esfahan and I really enjoyed your performance which was absolutely wonderful. I have to mention , I have never been enjoyed a concert

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since I was at university. For your information, I studied music at the University of London , and I have

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played the piano since I was a child .So I know how is it hard to sing with only one musical instrument which is Santor .

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, I want to ask you if one day you need a piano player , that would be my honour to play beside you as you know I am professional in

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and if you want , I can play for you ,of course, if you have free time . I am looking forward to receiving an answer from you and if you accepted me I would really appreciate it and

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again thank you for your great performance. Yours Sincerely, Sarah Ahmadi

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