You will go to a foreign country to stay there for one year, and you need a place to live in. You have decided to write to an agency for accommodation.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to get some details about accommodation in Sydney that your agency can arrange for me. I have been accepted at Macquarie University in a research-based Master's degree programme, and I will start my classes next June. I will stay there for one year and my wife will accompany me during my stay there.

Therefore

, I need a separate accommodation, not the one the university has offered me in its residence hall. I am looking for a studio apartment that will not cost me more than $1500 per month and is located within

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walking distance of the university. It would be ideal if the apartment comes with a fully equipped kitchen and fully furnished rooms with windows that allow natural light and fresh air. It would be a bonus if we

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access shopping malls, markets, a park and other public amenities without travelling a long distance. I will fly to Sydney on 29th May and would highly appreciate it if you

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send me details of several accommodations - the kind I am looking for, within the budget. I am hoping to hear from you soon regarding

this

. Yours faithfully, Avinash Kumar

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

200 words

7.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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You will go to a foreign country to stay there for one year, and you need a place to live in. You have decided to write to an agency for accommodation.

When children start school, teachers have more influence on their intellectual and social development than their parent. To what extent do you agree or disagree

In some places old age is valued, while in other culture youth is considered more importance. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

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