You will go to a foreign country to stay there for one year, and you need a place to live in. You have decided to write to an agency for accommodation.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to get some details about accommodation in Sydney that your agency can arrange for me. I have been accepted at Macquarie University in a research-based Master's degree programme, and I will start my classes next June. I will stay there for one year and my wife will accompany me during my stay there.

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, I need a separate accommodation, not the one the university has offered me in its residence hall. I am looking for a studio apartment that will not cost me more than $1500 per month and is located within

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walking distance of the university. It would be ideal if the apartment comes with a fully equipped kitchen and fully furnished rooms with windows that allow natural light and fresh air. It would be a bonus if we

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access shopping malls, markets, a park and other public amenities without travelling a long distance. I will fly to Sydney on 29th May and would highly appreciate it if you

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send me details of several accommodations - the kind I am looking for, within the budget. I am hoping to hear from you soon regarding

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. Yours faithfully, Avinash Kumar

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 8.0

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You will go to a foreign country to stay there for one year, and you need a place to live in. You have decided to write to an agency for accommodation.

Students today can easily access information online, and therefore libraries are no longer necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

In many countries government are investing on new technology to deal with the public. Why is this happening. Do you think this is an approciate use of government money?

Some people believe that climate has the greatest effect on people ‘s way of life. Others believe that the economy of the region has the greatest effect. Discuss both view and give you own opinion.

Some people believe that charities should help people in need no matter where those people are in the world,Others feel that these organizations should only serve the people living in the country where they are based Discuss both sides and give your own view.