The presence of technology in the classroom has become more and more apparent and offers students tremendous resources with which to supplement their education. Given time, technology will completely replace the traditional teacher in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree with the above statement?

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that technology is going to delete the old school ways of teaching and even the teachers.
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these days and it shows that how cool are the apps are. So it is so difficult to compete with artificial
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, they could be the future teachers of our classrooms.
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