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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible ina scientific research, bussiness and the acedemic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Dicuss both the views and give your own opinion?

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It is argued between the public whether exchanging material is a useful tool in studies, research and business
however
, others think, it may be dangerous sometimes to share valuable
knowledge
 without any restrictions. I strongly believe that
knowledge
 should be shared with others to improve living standards in order of new inventions. On the one hand, sharing
information
 may lead to a revolution in every field because researchers use that
information
 and continue the research that can improve the ideas which are followed by
people
 for so many years.
For example
, in the science field, scientists are doing research on previous inventions so, they can know whether it is valid or not.
Therefore
, they make so many machines like refrigerators. It does not only save time but
also
 gives comfort to the public.
Moreover
, even in academics and business, the population learn from their mistakes, so that, they always keep the old record that can show the growth of the system.
On the other hand
, some
information
 is dangerous for mankind
therefore
, they don't reveal that
knowledge
 to others because they know the detrimental effects of it which may lead to the destruction of the beauty of nature.
For example
, scientists find a way to make a nuclear weapon if , they reveal the
information
 of preparing the weapon so that , antisocial
people
 use that
knowledge
 in the wrong way and destroy other
people
 live. Apart from it , the leading companies
also
 keep secret their formula of success that's why
,
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 they become maintain top positions in the marketing world. In conclusion,
although
 it leads to some negative impact on society by using the
information
 wrongly,
knowledge
 may change the lifestyle of
people
 if they use it wisely because it is the only way to implore the world with new inventions in technology as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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