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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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 must allocate
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 for public
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 of investing in arts like music and theatre which are considered unnecessary expenses. I completely agree with the statement that utilising
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's money only for public
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. The foremost reason for not considering an investment in arts is because only a few per cent of
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 enjoy listening to music that will only entertain them. In ,society public
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 mean hospitals, roads and transportation which are very important to every citizen.
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, in rural ,areas
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 are still facing many problems while travelling from one place to another because of the roads which are damaged due to rains. If the
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 release
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 for public
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 it will be very useful for the residents. There are many things that can be done with help of the
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 that are released by the
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 for public
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 as in the present day a few scientists have found how to save rainwater which is called rainwater harvesting which needs some amount to dwell in a few ponds and lakes to store water. Many
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 in rural areas are not able to have a good education because of fewer wages. So, with the help of
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 we can provide free education to society who cannot attend schools. Arts is a recreational activity
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 enjoyable by the wealthy community
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 20% of the population and the remaining 80% of
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 are economically poor and need these
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 to help themselves. To Conclude, I strongly believe that governments expenditure should not be on leisure activity which is used by only a few citizens
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 ought to spend on public
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 like education and hospitals which is beneficial to the common man and the whole society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural enrichment
  • expression of creativity
  • promote diversity
  • enhance social cohesion
  • boost tourism
  • job creation
  • stimulate economic growth
  • improve quality of life
  • essential services
  • maintenance and development
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