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Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think consumers are influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Today we are surrounded by advertisements all over the place. We see them in newspapers, Television, the Internet and on the walls.
Additionally
, as every day new organizations are coming into the competition so, customers tend to be influenced by them. I strongly feel that consumers are influenced by whatever they see.
In addition
 to ,
this
 it is said that human beings are greatly influenced by whatever they see and hear on daily basis. In order to influence the public companies present advertisements in
such
 a way that it inspires them to use them. For ,instance in the promotion of cars actors drive the car at a speed of 120 km per hour which attract youngsters to buy that car.
However
, there are some products which are presented to the general public
such
 as fast foods and cold drinks which are not good for their health.
In addition
 to
this
 producers ask big actors to act in the bulletin so, that they can attract a lot more people to buy it. For, example big film stars act in the bulletin of Pizza and burgers which influence young children to eat them. According to my view if we want to save future generations from the bad influence of ads
then
 authorities need to make some laws so, that they don't affect the lives of innocent citizens. In the I will conclude by saying that
although
 the majority of the companies will keep on making the ads and posters it is our responsibility to buy those things which are good for us and refuse the other things.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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