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The mark of a successful person is to be wealthy and have a successful career. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Wealth and a successful profession are considered as the symbol of
success
,sometimes, in
one
's
life
.In my opinion,I disagree with
this
 view because
happiness
 in
life
 and a successful family are the main things that really make a
person
's
life
 successful, according to me.
To begin
 with ,the prime factor that makes an individual's
life
 successful is
happiness
.That means,if a
person
 is not happy,he or she will not be able to enjoy any successes or achievements in
life
,
such
 as wealth.
For example
,
one
 of my friends,who is working as a senior employee in a multinational IT company with a hefty salary,is not able to enjoy his
life
 due to work stress and frustrations.
Hence
,an unsatisfactory job even has a heavy salary can not be considered as a mark of
success
 as it does not bring
happiness
 in
life
 .Job satisfaction, a good living atmosphere,having good friends are basic things that give
happiness
 to a
person
's
life
 and thereby
success
. Another mark of
success
 is a good family.People with a successful family means there is an understanding and caring relationship between the members of the family.In an ideal family members will be free to share their problems and get advice and support from the members .
This
 makes a
person
 successful in his career and
one
 can make use of the money he earned in a creative way as the
person
 is well guided and psychologically supported.
For instance
,even though I have very busy duties most of the duty days,when I reach my home,I will forget all the tensions of my duty and I
also
 enjoy memorable weekends with my family.
Therefore
, having a supportive family is key to
success
. To conclude,the symbol of
success
 in
life
 is family and
happiness
 without these
one
 cannot enjoy the benefits of his wealth and career.
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