Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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been changes in
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especially
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activities
of
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home
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information
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I will examine both the positive and negative aspects of
this
. On the one hand, many benefits from technology improve
people
life
.
First
of all, a lot of inventions and
softwares
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software
totally make
people
better off since the functions and abilities can improve
people
life
.
For example
, computers help everyone to access
information
easier than
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past, resulting in reducing time and cost to do leisure and work both at home and office.
Moreover
, technology creates
penty
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of chances in
life
such
as
people
can find jobs easily and quickly because of online hiring websites and
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can gain more income from the new types of works which is trader,
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who send many things.
Furthermore
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several drawbacks in
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life
of
people
. losing privacy is the
first
cons of
people
since many platforms and applications collect a lot of
information
from users and in some
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there are
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news reported about citizens
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tricked by
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a company
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companies
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that sold personal
information
or data leaked from their platform, leading to scammers can reach to them easier.
Lastly
, wasting a long period of time on social or applications with a loaded of data. To illustrate, there are massive unuseful
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on online platforms and everyone are likely to give
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attention
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attentions
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attention
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to them more or less. To sum up, it is true that
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technologies
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effect
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living
life
in
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ways not only at home but
also
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in work
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work place
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.
However
, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages since it can
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more effect and some of
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can reduce easily. If everyone used them
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ways, their
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and communities would develop in great areas.
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