in many countries, more and more men are staying at home to look after their children when women work full-time. What are the reasons? Is it positie or negative

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there
their
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after their
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. There are
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reasons
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higher job
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women
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quality
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work by
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positive
development since
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countries
the
women
population
is
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rising
and
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of that
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countries
are largely handled by
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50 years , the education system of
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most
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and more and more
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opportunities
were opened to
women
for higher education. Most of the
women
took
this
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opportunity
and they have managed to get good jobs like doctors, nurses and teachers .
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in Sri Lanka , most of the healthcare system runs by
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women
. Most doctors and nurses in the
country
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women
. They getting good
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salary
as well as good respect from the society. Since
then
, more and more
women
joining the healthcare system in the
country
than
men
. Since these persons have to do more long shift duties , most of the
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their
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husbands
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while
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they are working.
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is true for other jobs like communication, industrial as well as the service sectors in most
countries
since most of the job
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opportunities
are
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available
for females. In most aspects ,
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is a good trend
becouse
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because
due to several
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reasons
. The
women
population
in most
countryies
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countries
are far more than
male
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population
.
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in
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alnka
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Lanka
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53% of the
countries
population
are
women
. So they must need to
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actively
involved to the
ecomy
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economy
of the
country
. On other hand , when we consider
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the working
men
, working
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women
women's
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quality of the working as well as their
productiivity
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productivity
higher
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in most jobs. It becomes more economical for the
country
. In summary,
although
in most
countries
the main
work force
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is
men
, it is
rising
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trend to
women
becoming
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working force in
sertain
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certain
socities
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societies
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men
look after the children . There are
lot
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of reasons for
this
, but the
awailability
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availability
of good job
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opportunities
for
women
is the main cause. In most
aspects
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this
is a good
developments
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development
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since
women
are more economical than
men
in most aspects .
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