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Nowadays celebrities earn more money than politicians. What are the reasons for this?. Do you agree or disagree

#celebrities #money #politicians
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In recent times, the demand for
celebrities
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 has been growing exponentially in the entertainment industry.
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 some people argue that
celebrities
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 should not earn more than
politicians
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 as they are not doing good for citizens of the country while others believe that they deserve what they have worked for, and it is completely justified for them to earn from the hard
work
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 they do.
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politicians
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 is to
work
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 for the citizens and address all the possible problems and thereby they should earn better salaries than
celebrities
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.
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, in India Chief Minister helped the local population by providing them free electricity. Providing free electricity helped poor people to stay at home during hot summers.
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,
politicians
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work
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 towards environmental safety as it is becoming a major concern recently. Due to
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 concern, governments have started promoting electric vehicles and providing tax rebates on them. Looking at all the efforts by the government, they should earn more than
celebrities
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. On the other side,
celebrities
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work
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 hard to entertain their audiences. They
work
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 around the clock to make good subjects that motivate their viewers in a positive way. Movies related to freedom fighters, world war brings motivation and respect for the army in the mind of audiences.
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, companies do
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 promotions with help of actors as they get more fan following.
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 allows
product based
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 companies to market their products to their target audience. Like, Lionel Messi is a brand ambassador of Adidas shoes due to which Adidas attracts a lot of customers. To sum up, I think
celebrities
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 earn what they have worked for and it will be unreasonably biased to say that
politicians
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 should earn more.
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