It is impossible for governments to help all the people in the world who need helps, so governments should focus only on helping people in their own countries.
 To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, it seems that the gap between the rich and poor is widening in both individuals and
countries
.
However
, it is unlikely for wealthy
governments
to assist all
people
living in poverty and
thus
some
people
think that they can concentrate only on helping their own citizens. I partly agree with
this
view. One main reason in favour of
this
opinion is that it is the obligation of the
governments
to help their individuals living in pain and struggling.
This
is because
governments
monthly impose taxes on almost every working adult.
Thus
, I believe they should offer education to children from poor families, supply health care to patients who can not afford medical fees and allocate part of funds for pensions to support the well-being of retired, elderly
people
. Only by
this
, will adults who are making money be willing to pay taxes to
governments
, which is the base of the normal function of a nation.
However
, we should recognise that there still exist some
people
,
in particular
those in underdeveloped
countries
, who can not have access to basic living conditions,
such
as a tidy flat, clean water and sufficient food, and their government does not have the resources and funds to assist them.
Thus
, I think it is the
governments
with the ability, especially those in developed nations, who should cooperatively help their counterparts to get away from trouble because we are the only humans on Earth.
For example
, they can first send some food and help them build necessary infrastructure,
such
as roads and drainage systems, to satisfy their primary lives and improve their hygiene conditions.
Then
, they can send some exceptional doctors, leading agricultural professors and educationalists to assist in cultivating the professionals there, which will make a difference in the long-term development of those
countries
and help their
people
fundamentally.
Then
, there will be fewer
people
needing help and
this
is the meaning of human, from my perspective. In conclusion, I think
governments
should prioritise citizens in their own
countries
, but if they have the ability, it is necessary for them to make a joint effort to assist other
people
in trouble.
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