Being a celibrity –such as a famous film start or sports personality- brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

Nowadays, everyone wants to have a
life
like a big-name and part of the society deem that, having a
life
like a superstar has merits as well as demerits.
However
, I believe that it has more disadvantages than benefits. The following essay will discuss both the points and conclude logically in the end.
To begin
with, being a superstar makes more visible in current news and engineers more problems in private
life
. Given the fact that a
celebrity
lives almost
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privately and every day publicly.
Moreover
, having followed by paparazzi too much in routine may
also
lead to a dangerous accident in daily
life
.
For example
, Princess Diana was killed in a car crash in 1989 in Paris while being followed by a paparazzi in the car.
Furthermore
,
although
, they rent the very best security guys in the world, they are the easiest targets to be murdered by a terrorist group.
On the other hand
, some argue that
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having a
celebrity
life
not only creates a superior status in the society but most of the young would follow and admire them, young may feel more confident, after having a hair cut like his admoir famed.
Secondly
, a chance to grow into an immortal figure is
also
possible and what is ,more if a
celebrity
emerges as a god in a country.
For instance
, Sachin Tendulkar who used to play for the Indian male cricket team has become a god of cricket from his
celebrity
status. In the end, despite having few benefits of being a superstar, it has more dis-advantage in regular
life
as nothing is more important than
life
and privacy.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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Example:

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