Increased juvenile crime is attributed to violence in media. To what extend do you agree? What are the solutions?

Violence in
media
,
such
as TV
chennels
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channels
and social
media
, has been drastically increased resulting in elevated crime rates among adolescents.
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essay completely agrees with the statement while suggesting the solutions as reducing the exposure to
media
and spending time on sports.
Nature
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of violence among kids, nowadays, certainly increasing. Many people claim that it is because of the
media
contents
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which
contains
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different
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kind
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of brutality.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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