It is generally accepted that exercise is good for children and teenagers. Therefore, physical education and sport should be compulsory for all students in all schools. What do you think? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is rightly
said
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"Health is wealth and when it is lost
everthing
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everything
is lost". For better physical growth and development of
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children
chidren
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it should be
compulsary
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compulsory
for each and every
students
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to participate in sports in all schools. I believe from the above statement that it is the best way to make all the
student
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fit as a fiddle. I will shed
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my views with some examples in the following paragraphs. There are several reasons why
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think that physical education ought to be mandatory
to
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for
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all children in every school because exercise is the best way to boost their energy and makes them feel fresh for
long
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duration which
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their concentration and efficiency.
For example
, some psychologists state that a student is studying for 4-5 hours without any break could gradually decrease their concentration and may lead to saturation in thinking power.
Moreover
, sports helps to control weight which
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their body growth and increase their strength
also
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their body disease-free.
In addition
to
this
, some
adolescent
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are good
in
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games with the help of proper
guidences
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guidance
from
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they can learn more properly and explore
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their
intrested
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interested
sports.
For instance
, an Indian cricketer
such
as Virat
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is
an
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average in their
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but he is good in cricket and now he is one of the famous
indian
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Indian
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personality
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known
by
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their game. To conclude, all education departments include
sport
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period in their time-table which is
benifical
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beneficial
for student mental and physical growth which helps in focus and to increase their productivity.
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