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Since people can study through the internet, schools have become unnecessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The
Internet
 has been developing rapidly and due to these developments, it is easier for people to study via the
internet
, and think
school
 is unessential. To my way of thinking, I disagree with the above statement and provide my supporting examples in
this
 essay. The advantage of using the
internet
 is that it improves people’s living standards in a number of ways,
such
 it has made the environment healthier and saved people’s time. Learning online means less need to travel and
hence
 better air quality.
Thus
, it benefits the environment. To cite an example, due to the coronavirus, many students are now studying online and
this
 has reduced air pollution.
Furthermore
, with the vast information on the
internet
 people could take up anything they like to learn. In retrospect, people must spend a long time going to
school
. With the development of wireless technology now, scholars are able to seek all the topics that they want to. From my perspective, the
school
 is providing huge benefits
except
Add the preposition
forexcept
show examples
 academic subjects
such
 as communication skills, social skills through leadership, socialization, friendship and many others. Those kinds of skills cannot be figured out at home. By means that the students still need to gain more knowledge at
school
 rather than via the
internet
, while the additional learning could be deserved out of the
school
.
Besides
, the more about using the
internet
 as a priority for the study will
also
 lead to the serious cause, since, its influence the low of the health condition of the teenagers. Some pupils could suffer from the irritation of their eyes,
for instance
, as they always depend more on using the gadget for study which need plenty of time. To recapitulate,
Although
 the
internet
 is an indispensable part of life, it cannot supplement the necessity of going to
school
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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