You recently stayed in a hotel in a large city. The weather was very unusual for the time of year and the heating / cooling system in the hotel was quite inadequate. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter: give details of what went wrong explain what you had to do to overcome the problem at the time say what action you would like the manager to take You do NOT need to write your own address. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ..., You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You should write at least 150 words

Dear Sir or Madam,
This
letter is being written in regards to
dissatisfactory
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experience I had while residing at your hotel
last
week particularly about the air -
conditoning
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conditioning

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system.
Last
Saturday, I stayed at your hotel for two during my business trip
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New Delhi.
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,
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food was appetizing and offered wide
varieties
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of cuisines.
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, it was too hot outside and my room's air conditioning system stopped working
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the
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midnight.
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, I
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tired
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by myself as I have little knowledge related to electronic gadgets but I was unable to cope with the situation. In fact, I made a call at reception
also
but no one answered it. It was
terrible
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experience for me as I have spent my whole night in
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. I would urge you to keep a check on each and everything before allotting any room to visitors.
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, all these incidents will tarnish the image of your hotel. I hope you will keep all my points into consideration if you want to keep a healthy customer relationship .Looking forward
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my
next
visit. Yours sincerely Manvir Lauren.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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