Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, there is a
dramatical
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increase in
advertisement
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the advertisement
an advertisement
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. It is said that many
advertisements
encourage
people
spend
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to spend
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more
money
on unnecessary things.
However
, others and I believe that
advertisements
will introduce new
products
which are maybe helpful.
This
essay will discuss some arguments around
this
matter and present my stand. On the one hand, it is irrefutable that there are so many
advertisements
cause
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that cause
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the waste of
money
for unuseful
products
.
For instance
, it can be seen a lot of
advertisements
of
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for
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costumes everywhere, which usually
attracttive
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attractive
to women to spend more and more
money
on clothes that maybe are not really necessary.
This
leads to many
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husbands
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believe
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believing
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that
advertisements
are harmful.
On the other hand
, others believe that
advertisement
is truly much more beneficial.
First
of all, if there is
not
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no
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advertisement
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an advertisement
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,
people
will get difficult to find
products
or services that they need because of
lack
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a lack
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of information. To
illustrade
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illustrate
, a person wants to traveling to
foreign
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a foreign
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country, but he
have
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has
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no experience to travel by own.
Therefore
, he
need
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needs
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to find a tourist company
which
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that
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has a lot of foreign tours to help him solve
this
case. If he
come
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comes
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across an
advertisement
of
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for
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foreign tours, he can easily begin his trip
instead
of finding information about foreign tours.
Additionally
,
advertisements
will help
people
have
variety
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a variety
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of choices.
For example
, a
women
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woman
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wants to buy some new
products
about skincare, because her old
products
are not effective. So she can go to a mall and
tries
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try
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some
sample
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samples
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of new skincare
products
before choosing the right
products
suitable for her skin. In conclusion, I believe
advertisements
are not bad if they are targeted
on
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at
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right
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the right
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customers who really need these
products
or services.
Nevertheless
,
people
carefully consider before making decisions of spending
money
on everything to avoid
of
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apply
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waste as well.
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