Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, there is a
dramatical
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increase in
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advertisement
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the advertisement
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. It is said that many
advertisements
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encourage
people
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spend
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to spend
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more
money
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on unnecessary things.
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, others and I believe that
advertisements
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will introduce new
products
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which are maybe helpful.
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essay will discuss some arguments around
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matter and present my stand. On the one hand, it is irrefutable that there are so many
advertisements
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cause
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that cause
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the waste of
money
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for unuseful
products
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.
For instance
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, it can be seen a lot of
advertisements
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of
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for
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costumes everywhere, which usually
attracttive
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attractive
to women to spend more and more
money
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on clothes that maybe are not really necessary.
This
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leads to many
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believe
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that
advertisements
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are harmful.
On the other hand
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, others believe that
advertisement
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is truly much more beneficial.
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of all, if there is
not
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no
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advertisement
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an advertisement
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,
people
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will get difficult to find
products
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or services that they need because of
lack
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a lack
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of information. To
illustrade
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illustrate
, a person wants to traveling to
foreign
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a foreign
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country, but he
have
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has
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no experience to travel by own.
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, he
need
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to find a tourist company
which
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that
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has a lot of foreign tours to help him solve
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case. If he
come
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comes
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across an
advertisement
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of
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for
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foreign tours, he can easily begin his trip
instead
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of finding information about foreign tours.
Additionally
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,
advertisements
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will help
people
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have
variety
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a variety
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of choices.
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, a
women
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woman
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wants to buy some new
products
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about skincare, because her old
products
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are not effective. So she can go to a mall and
tries
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try
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some
sample
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samples
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of new skincare
products
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before choosing the right
products
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suitable for her skin. In conclusion, I believe
advertisements
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are not bad if they are targeted
on
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at
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right
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the right
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customers who really need these
products
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or services.
Nevertheless
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,
people
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carefully consider before making decisions of spending
money
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on everything to avoid
of
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apply
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waste as well.
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